Wednesday, November 30, 2011

"Mind, Groin, or Both. Inserting the Sex Scene" BY Charlie Kenmore

Okay, you've gone to great pains to develop your _____ (insert characters). Enough with the damn plot development. It's time for a sex scene. It's also decision time. What is the purpose of the scene? Is the sex supposed to cement the characters' relationship? Is it a casual release? Is it the breaking point? The purpose of the scene often dictates the best approach to its portrayal.

In Earth Angel, I wanted the sex scenes to further the characters' relationships. Prince Dzhok (who goes by Jack) is a Qpiad (often misspelled as "cupid" in Earthside English). "Make love, not war" is central to his persona. He makes loves often, with over 1980 offspring. The Qpiad are human appearing humanoids with one significant distinguishing ability. They are always a perfect sexual fit for their partners, regardless of size, species, or color. Jack takes his lovemaking very seriously, and is an All-Realms master of the simultaneous orgasm. Accordingly, with Jack, it was important to focus on his techniques.

Salash, Jack's oldest friend and lover, the mother of 22 of his children, is a full blooded High Sidhe. The High Sidhe are extremely flexible. When an Earthside gymnast scores a "10", the judges should always check for High Sidhe blood. With Salash, I needed to show her flexibility.

Having identified the purpose of the sex scene, the next decision is the lexicon. The mechanics of any sex scene, whether M-F, F-F, or M-M are going to be pretty much the same. Tactile stimulation is followed by some form of penetration in one or more orifices. But the word choices one uses to describe the process are the key. Identify your target, the mind, the groin, or both, and attack.

The Mind: In one sense this is both the easiest and the hardest target. The more that is left to the imagination, the greater the attack on the mind. "He undid another button, then kicked the door shut....Mary woke the next morning..." In this case, the sex is entirely inferential, and may be as hot and kinky or as quick and vanilla as the reader chooses. However, if you truly wish to engage the reader's mind, then be prepared to show the reader everything that happened once the door closed. Describe the mounting sensations, the distended time, and the cataclysmic finale. Focus on anything and everything except the actual physical act, except as may be necessary to describe the next round of sensations. Use metaphors and similies rather than descriptions of the physical act.

The Groin: This is probably the easiest approach. Just call it like you see it. Describe the participants' physical attributes in as much detail as you desire, then focus on the mechanics. Be sure to add telling sound effects.

Both: This one is a bit trickier. You need to handle this like a sports broadcast. Part of you needs to write the play by play, while another part provides the "color".

That said, here's a quickie from Earth Angel:

As Salash climbed back onto the bed, Jack flipped over on top of Brunhilde, and slowly guided himself inside her. Although Brunhilde stood a full head taller than Jack, he had no trouble filling her, much to her pleasant surprise. In fact, she remarked that next to Thor, he was probably the largest she had ever had, and she never would have guessed from looking him over just before he got into the bath.

He did not take offense at the comparison. He knew he could be larger than Thor if he so chose. He preferred his current size, which was a custom fit to Brunhilde’s hot, wet passage. Salash placed her hands on either side of Brunhilde‘s head, then pressed herself up into a handstand with her legs straight and together. She then slowly bent at the waist into an inverted pike position until she formed a perfect inverted “L”, with her legs parallel to Brunhilde’s body, extending just slightly over Jack’s head. Whenever a human gymnast scores a perfect “10”, the officials should always check for Sidhe blood―but they never do. Salash opened her legs, extended her tongue, and slowly bent her arms until her legs rested on Jack’s shoulders.

Brunhilde had time for a quick “Showoff!” before Salash’s tongue was in her mouth. Jack leaned forward and began tonguing Salash, while vigorously pumping Brunhilde until they all came simultaneously. Let Thor try to pull that one off!

Thanks for letting me ramble.




Blurb: There are seven parallel worlds known as the Seven Realms which are separated by a Veil. Six are inhabited by all manner of entities, some natural, some not. That may not be the case for much longer. The first portion of the High Sidhe Prophecy of the Sevens has been fulfilled. The Anarch, who is one with the Veil, has escaped. If she chooses, she can part or drop the Veil or she can lift the Veil in its entirety. The Seven Realms will converge. The laws of physics and magic will collide head on. Unless she is stopped,there will be nothing left.

Queen Amura has called for an assembly of the signatories to the High Sidhe's Second Accords, a multi-realm peace treaty to consider how to deal with the threat of the Anarch. An Earthside TechnoWitch and other dark forces also are seeking to control the Anarch. Prince Dzhok (Jack), High Sidhe Ambassador Salash (Jack's oldest friendand lover), and Valkyrie Brunhilde set out to find and befriend the Anarch before all is lost.

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I am a 52 year old professional from St. Louis, Missouri with one very significant other(A.K.A. "Alexx Momcat"), two grown kids, and two cats. I enjoy collecting books, art and cooking. But with my double and triple stacked bookshelves sagging, I look forward to the new era of e-publishing. An avid garage sale hunter, I am still searching for an oil painting by Edouard Leon Cortes (or anything from the Drip and Drool School like Pollack or Rothko that can be sold so I can buy my Cortes).

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